Okay so these were some of the common gathered feedback from the rough cut session.
1) Paul hated our blacks and suggested that we used cutaways of the estate instead. However, Taylor loved the blacks and felt that it complemented our opening and the voiceover from Anton (our interviewee).
2) Subject topic was great but needed governmental figures since it was a huge social topic not only in Melbourne but in other parts of the world as well
3) The kids added alot of flavour to the documentary and they wanted to see more kids
4) Structure of film not strong enough (A story flow not established yet)
5) Sound levels in between cuts unclear and could be raised. Sound overlaying the blacks has to be raised.
6) Need more insight to the kids lives and their future
7) Enjoyed the different opinions from kids and the adults
Robin said that something is still missing. The main element of this film is still missing and we need to build our cut without caring about the nig nags like sound and cutaways first as our structure is still not established.
Things to work on:
We needed to have more cutaways of the tenants and their houses. We’ll need to go through most of the interview footages as well and pick only strong materials that would have impact on the setting of the documentary. This meant strategic planning of who we want to use and who we want to completely scrape.
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